WALT: Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers
My paragraph
I was kidnaped and taken into an abandoned Warehouse. I was scared,
my teeth were chattering. I was tied up on the chair with the light
beaming down on me. It had graffiti on the walls.
I saw them walking in I couldn't get a clear sight of them but I knew they were
bad. There was three of them. They were wearing bandanas, my first look at them I thought they were desert people but they weren’t I took a closer look
and realised they were iran terrorists that kidnaped me. I was so scared.
They put me at gunpoint but they did not shoot me I was lucky. They took the
handkerchief out of my mouth and made me tell them the truth. THE END
my teeth were chattering. I was tied up on the chair with the light
beaming down on me. It had graffiti on the walls.
I saw them walking in I couldn't get a clear sight of them but I knew they were
bad. There was three of them. They were wearing bandanas, my first look at them I thought they were desert people but they weren’t I took a closer look
and realised they were iran terrorists that kidnaped me. I was so scared.
They put me at gunpoint but they did not shoot me I was lucky. They took the
handkerchief out of my mouth and made me tell them the truth. THE END
SELF ASSESSMENT
To work on :
I need to work on making my punctuation better and in better places.
Things that i have done well :
I have made the story more interesting in more places.
Peer assessment
I liked it and it was interesting. It was also a bit short
By George
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